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BookWorm
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 |  Subject: Almost Mon 28 Jun 2010 - 1:24 | |
| I fell like I need to explain this poem a little more... it turned out cuter than I wanted, but I still feel like this explanation is necessary. So... for those of you who don't know... I battle depression, it comes in waves for me, so for a couple days at a time I will be really depressed, and fine the rest of the time. About a month, or a month and a half ago, I was going through one of these times, and I went for a walk, which led me to a cliff, which I almost jumped off of... the only reason I didn't jump.... well... read the poem...<3. So yeah, this is kind of from the heart.
Almost
I don't know how he knows,
but I don't question it.
That walk, that cliff,
what I almost did.
Tonight, he holds me
in his arms.
As if his embrace
keeps me safe from harm.
I wish I could tell him
the whole story.
What I was thinking
on the top of that quarry.
As I looked down below,
the note in my hand.
Sweet innocent boy,
he wouldn't understand.
Of all the reasons
I had to go.
The one that kept me,
was my loving beau.
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CaR_HoPPeR
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| | Subject: Re: Almost Mon 28 Jun 2010 - 1:25 | |
| Lol, need to hire you for Love Poems for Love cards come with me! xD
Good Poem, rhymes and made my Gf sighed with relief. | |
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BookWorm
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CaR_HoPPeR
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| | Subject: Re: Almost Mon 28 Jun 2010 - 1:29 | |
| thank god, I'm terrible at compliments right now. | |
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Bestdragon3
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| | Subject: Re: Almost Mon 28 Jun 2010 - 2:00 | |
| Beautiful poem Liz... I just have to say, I'm glad you didn't jump... | |
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Ashaon
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| | Subject: Re: Almost Mon 28 Jun 2010 - 5:58 | |
| - bestdragon3 wrote:
- Beautiful poem Liz... I just have to say, I'm glad you didn't jump...
That.. | |
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The Wanderer
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BookWorm
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| | Subject: Re: Almost Mon 28 Jun 2010 - 8:14 | |
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Nurellia
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| | Subject: Re: Almost Mon 28 Jun 2010 - 10:36 | |
| *hugs* I'm glad you didn't jump dear, you remind me of me sometimes...
Beautiful poem... <3<3<3<3 | |
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Capricorn Hunter
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| | Subject: Re: Almost Mon 28 Jun 2010 - 14:53 | |
| I really like this poem Liz. It rhymed, but not in a cheesy way. It was simple but effective. I hope you write more stuff like this; I enjoyed it. | |
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BookWorm
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| | Subject: Re: Almost Mon 28 Jun 2010 - 17:56 | |
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Nurellia
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| | Subject: Re: Almost Mon 28 Jun 2010 - 19:33 | |
| You're very welcome <3 ^^ | |
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BookWorm
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| | Subject: Re: Almost Mon 28 Jun 2010 - 22:58 | |
| So, I think I need to rename this poem... but I don't know to what... the poem I started writing actually had nothing to do with this and that's where the title came from, looking at it now, it doesn't really fit. Suggestions? | |
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BookWorm
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| | Subject: Re: Almost Wed 7 Jul 2010 - 23:55 | |
| Urg... title is still bugging me, someone help me fix this title!!! | |
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Zentaku
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| | Subject: Re: Almost Mon 9 Aug 2010 - 2:11 | |
| hmmm... how about "Saved"? or maybe "Caught"? | |
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... at least I'm taking that as a compliment XD
